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PLEASE rewrite the narration to be present tense only. I want to like this game but I cannot stand past tense in VNs, it's extremely immersion breaking. The only thing worse than past tense narration is mixed tense narration.

Also, being able to set the characters' age as well as name would be pretty cool.

ETA: after having played a bit more, it's not just that the narration is past tense that bothers me, but there is way too much of it. This is a visual medium, treat it as such. As an example, saying "the girl was shocked" is completely unnecessary when her expression changes to show she is shocked.

Also, fuck AI slop. The real art in this is so nice, don't ruin it with trash.

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Hey! <3

thanks a lot for your detailed comment! I'll try to break down on it so you(and others too!) better understand my motivation and perspective :)

I'll try to pay more attention to being more consequent with the narrative - it's the first time I'm doing it so I'll add more focus on it, thanks for the tip! I'll try to limit on the descriptions in situations which are already visible too :)

As for AI - I understand it can be disheartening for some, but currently I can't afford arts for the game other than the character sprites; It's a hobby project, I am not a professional and I also have family & work - all of the money from Patreon is invested  back into the arts - but that's $200 a month (right now, it was $50 last month) which means I can literally afford one or two arts per month. If I slow down on updates, people will start unsubscribing hence the patreon would start shrinking; In order to move to a full hand-drawn process I'd need the patreon to be _at least_ 10 times bigger, and that's still a point where I personally won't make a dime out of it (writing, coding, "marketing" and whatnot). 

Because of all that I want to find a balance of hand drawn and AI at the beginning, and then redraw AI to hand drawn arts when I can afford it. 

In my head it's the only way to make the odds be in my favor, else it's abandoning the project. And I don't want to abandon it, cause I always wanted to create something kinky and funny with these characters :)