Does what it sets out to do really well. Uses the interactive medium to great effect. Doesn't over-complicate - gets its message across in a brilliantly blunt way. I breezed through it a while back, and I keep thinking back over it again.
I did enjoy your "stiff little story" 😅 lol
No need to be so self-conscience about your first non-state IF, you did fine!
I really appreciated the classic feeling of physical CYOA books, that came from having all the "pages" arranged after one another by number.