I really loved the writing in this one. While there was plenty of silliness and the romantic plot felt a bit contrived, the charming cast of characters, the good pacing, and, most of all, the competent way the writing focused on the MC's inner world was what really sold this experience for me. On a side note, this entry might have the best written sex scene I can remember out of all the FVNs I've read so far.

In terms of presentation, I appreciated the way you added new expressions of your own making to Cody's sprites. They were really expressive and complemented the side characters' lovely quirkiness very well.

While most of the individual pieces of this story are great, I guess the main "flaw" is that this ends up being a "feel-good" Cindarella kind of story, while it could have been much more.