Delightful writing! The organized production shines through. I love the story, writing, UI, and especially the zey/zir/zem pronouns.
The Ren'Py together with the writing quickly immerses the player in the narrative and inflects the text. Behold, inflection.
The first scene:
*click*
You wake up.
*click*
You get dressed and ready.
...
We need more! The voice is the narrator's, in second person. From there, we go to August's first scene in third person. Zey appear. Zey drum zir fingers on the bar. Suddenly, the voice switches to second person. There is an opportunity to use different to punctuate those shifts.
love this! great little story about recovering from abuse. the drink-creation element is fun and makes the player feel a little more involved despite not being functions-wise much different from clicking through the text. also august is really cool.