Interesting story telling.  You could animate it more and  make it feel more like a game, to me it felt more like a reading a novel.  The password did not work in my computer when it was requested, maybe that made me miss the fun.  

I sell someone here that has taken some writing classes/tried to get their book published. A couple of story beats where a little too bluntly expressed for my liking. For example Richard wouldn't introduce himself as the head of the illegal gambling mafia. But it's understandable, since you can't write several chapters slowly hinting things and expect raters to read it all.

Looks like you have already mastered the trademarked telltale inconsequential choices and dead ends :)

The presentation was very cool.

Also writing a password in plain text even for an application this inconsequential is bad form. Cheaters gonna cheat and hackers gonna hack.

Interesting writing! Good job.

I'm not very into this kind of games, but this seems pretty well executed to me. Good job, mate. Hope you can check and rate mine aswell

Have a great week :)

Wow what a very chilling story! Man that was some crazy stuff with the theme, but it works! this is different to other text adventures in that the graphics were very smooth. Sadly no sound though. Besides that, great job!