Nice idea, the thought of a Havoc brother being tortured is captivating. One thing that stood out was the how the characters seem to go from placid, in a verbal sparring match, to explosive anger and back again; this lost some of the tension building I think you were going for.

As a Havoc Brothers player, I wanted to enjoy this more than I did. The dialog was difficult to follow without cues to who said what. I appreciate the effort!

I love the idea behind this one, but it was a tough read… the dialogue felt very unnatural, the ending was unsatisfying, and the writing errors (punctuation, spelling, tense switch) took me out of the story as well. 

I think there is an awesome story here, as the thought of a human interrogator trying to get info from a Havoc Brother is titillating, but I think this needs to be edited around some more. Would love to see this given a bit more time!