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A nicely written story that I really enjoyed. A bit of a slow start but once I got into it, the imagery was brilliant.

Thank you so much! It was great fun to get inside the head of an Orc!

Oh the subtle humour laced through this was the icing on the cake! Great story telling the interaction at the end was brilliant too. Great job.

Totally gripping from beginning to end.

Great job on this! I don't think the Wardens get enough love and there is so much scope to develop them, and you did just that! The imagery you portrayed was great.

Such good pacing throughout, I was totally engrossed. Great job.

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Hats off for the ambition of this piece and great concepts. Maybe trying to add a little too much in, but feel of the frantic panic was palpable. Well done.

Thanks, glad you enjoyed the orcs!

Glad you liked it! It always bugged me why orcs were green...

Absolutely superb. The basic premise was solid and then the little surprises thrown in kept the excitement up. Then the image of the castellan was beautiful and a great ending. Great stuff!

Thanks! The word constraint was tough on this one as I had more I wanted to put in but alas, I've left it to your imagination!

A great story, told from a unique angle whilst subtlety aligning to the theme superbly. Very well done!

Yup me too. Was waiting for someone else to open it first...

Really well written and paced. Kept me engaged right to the end...but what happened in the next fight?! 

Fantastically written, great job of conveying the emotions of the cast. Brilliant to see some Starhost stories. 

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it! There has always been something that bugged me about the GW Orcs so I wanted to take a different approach; glad it paid off! 

Thank you so much! Have been thinking about Orcs since the last Jam as I didn't read any stories with them as the main characters - glad it paid off 😁

Thanks, I was particularly chuffed with myself over that title! Agree totally that the ending was on the nose, but I thought it fit the general demeanour of the Boss...

Haha, thanks! Never heard of those books...maybe I'll check them out!

Wow. Really clear story telling and captivating throughout. Pancake! Great stuff, I'd love to read more!

Good narrative with a very nicely written ending. 

A slower start drew me in as the story built very well. I really enjoyed the imagery at the end and the detail of the astronomy book. Nice job!

Really nice, the ending was well set up throughout and the whole piece worked nicely - kinda felt bad for Arkan!

Loved the take on the lore and the writing of this story. Well done 👍 

Superb imagery and development of characters in such a short space. Really enjoyed reading this!

Absolutely compelling. Brilliant stuff!

Totally drew me into the world. Loved the whole build up and then to deliver that last line...👌

I was totally hooked from beginning to end! Great idea and execution.

Very well told and some great imagery!

An intriguing, well paced story. The premise was great and as the plot unfurled, the theme emerged. Great stuff

Really liked the storytelling here, and I thought the ending "wideshot" from space capped it off nicely! 

This story was awesome. Really liked the changing of perspective with each passing of a character. 

Haha don't apologise, I assume it was exactly the emotional response you were going for, and you nailed it!

As a parent I can say unequivocally that I empathised with the parents rage and revenge!! I think that's why the last bit was a bit odd as that emotional peak overshadowed the lore aspect (especially as I'm more into AoF!).

Anyway, loved the story, great job!

Thanks for the feedback! I wanted to keep the energy of the piece, which I find really difficult in short episodes, hence the prose. I hoped the tenses would do the job...partial success 😁

Thank you so much! Honestly had not considered that way of thinking about it 🤣

Thank you SO much!

Thank you! I had fun writing this in the first person (escapism is great)!

Thank you!

Ah! This is my first Jam so didn't realise! Will go read the others 😁