This was one of the first ones I read, sadly I couldn't rate it due to the queue having other ideas. I hope M'kolo lives (and maybe gets himself a cool cyber arm) just for his awesome name. Getting caught between Alien Hive and Havoc Disciples is pretty bad luck.

Well done, I liked the intrigue that was immediately halted by a realistic action. I also liked how they went from one rock in a hard place to another.

There were a few run-ons, I also suspect that you're afraid of commas.

All in all, good entry. I look forward to seeing what you do next jam.

A good grim entry into the contest.