I have to say the story was well done! The characters were well conveyed, the mc was relatable and the whole situation with the grandma was sad because that kind of thing happens a lot. 

I really liked how you intertwined the whole idea of Halloween in the middle of the tale, so great job on that area! 

The audio and music were serviceable, and the art was pretty good as well. 

The art complimented the story and the use of animations I thought was done in an effective and dramatic way. 

Great job overall! 

Pretty short, so I played it five times to try different choice combinations. (Also, on my first two playthroughs, I’d forgotten to plug in my headphones, so I had to replay it anyway).

Being a short game I think I’ll conflate some of the rating categories instead of trying to write feedback for each one:

Theme and story: pretty good, although when there’s several choices I tend to try the different combinations, especially in a short game like this, and it seems each choice only affected a smaller part of the game rather than there being combinations doing different things (other than whatever happens if you let the timer run out: it jumped all the way to the next choice and ended up drawing the door partially in front of the MC which I don’t think was intended).

Audio: Nice, especially the music, but also the sound effects (though I feel like it would be nice if there were an option to turn down the volume of the “typing” sound).

Characters and art: I think the art is pretty good. And I think you managed to build an interesting relationship between the characters in a fairly short story.

UI and accessibility: The UI seems bit basic (perhaps the choice buttons could have a texture like the textbox, and having options like “auto” and “back” would probably be nice too). For such a short VN it’s not a big deal, but being able to go one line back and re-read it would be nice, or at least make it so that when I reach the end I could go back to the beginning without reloading the tab. And there’s lines of text at the beginning that show after one another without me having to press anything, so if I were a bit slower at reading I could have struggled with those. At least the white text on the black background is easy to read.

Marketing: I’m not sure the logline “unfinished eerie stories of the Mei’s family” says much about which genre this is, and the logo almost has a sci-fi look to it. The game page does look interesting, but even that one could do with more text so that people have a clue what type of game to expect before they click “play”.

What I liked most: The dialogue and music. What I’d suggest changing: adding an option to restart the game.