+ Oh yeah, fire - this is going to be a rough one.
+ Oh, maybe no fire? + Oh no, there's fire :P + I actually really like the back-and-forth buildup of the post's fictional elements in regards to the danger and allure of fire, nicely done. + There are definitely a few words I'd change here and there to fit the established Wildsea tone, but the actual content of the writing flows really well and the ideas it's tackling are ripe for a post too. As long-time wildsailors might know, I've been teasing the Pyremind for years now - this is a different approach to the same topic, and a gentler one too. Good stuff. + Hoard of Fire needs some balancing, but A Scripture All Must Read is on point. + Ha, yeah, I'd definitely tone down the power of some of the aspects, but there's some really good ideas here. The whisper-lamp in particular, and the way it allows you to see without seeing, is brilliant. + "You have the longest shadow" I bet @EuphoRic is going to like that one. + Great fiction behind these aspects. + That second mire is gold.
Definitely worth a read thematically, even if I think some of the aspects need tuning. Damn good job.
well im sure i dont need to explain how meaningful this is to read!
this also reminds me that i never indicated that A Scripture All Must Read, Even the Blind and Moth's Answer are all quoted from Book of Hours so I'm gonna update the thing to say that
its maybe selfish, or lazy, but i'm glad the themes held up more than i'm worried about the balance.
thank you for checking it out and leaving these words here!
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+ Oh yeah, fire - this is going to be a rough one.
+ Oh, maybe no fire?
+ Oh no, there's fire :P
+ I actually really like the back-and-forth buildup of the post's fictional elements in regards to the danger and allure of fire, nicely done.
+ There are definitely a few words I'd change here and there to fit the established Wildsea tone, but the actual content of the writing flows really well and the ideas it's tackling are ripe for a post too. As long-time wildsailors might know, I've been teasing the Pyremind for years now - this is a different approach to the same topic, and a gentler one too. Good stuff.
+ Hoard of Fire needs some balancing, but A Scripture All Must Read is on point.
+ Ha, yeah, I'd definitely tone down the power of some of the aspects, but there's some really good ideas here. The whisper-lamp in particular, and the way it allows you to see without seeing, is brilliant.
+ "You have the longest shadow" I bet @EuphoRic is going to like that one.
+ Great fiction behind these aspects.
+ That second mire is gold.
Definitely worth a read thematically, even if I think some of the aspects need tuning. Damn good job.
oh wow
well im sure i dont need to explain how meaningful this is to read!
this also reminds me that i never indicated that A Scripture All Must Read, Even the Blind and Moth's Answer are all quoted from Book of Hours so I'm gonna update the thing to say that
its maybe selfish, or lazy, but i'm glad the themes held up more than i'm worried about the balance.
thank you for checking it out and leaving these words here!