I love the visual style of your sprites and backgrounds! They have an ethereal quality that complements the story quite well.
I like the heart of the story. What do we do in the face of imminent, unavoidable death? What gives us comfort in our final moments? Do we accept our fate and face it courageously, or bargain, plead, and try to flee from the inevitable?
I was slightly worried at the very beginning, noticing some misspellings in the warning message, but didn't notice any throughout the story itself. I don't personally mind as long as I can understand the intent, but I know that some people see it as an immediate turnoff.
I don't want people to see that and write off your novel before looking at it further. Your vn has too much effort put into it to be overlooked! After the jam, I would suggest updating that part at least.
Overall, I really liked your story, and look forward to what you come up with in the future!