I can see your artistic progression since "When I Knew You" with more refined character sprites, and I feel your writing has also improved. I like the visual flair of the comic book style.
My only nitpick is I do feel a few of the photo backgrounds were too busy for the scenes.
I was waiting for the use of color and wasn't disappointed. I knew it was going to give 'the moment' maximum impact.This was a great story with good pacing and potential to be expounded on in future installments should you ever choose to do so.