You need to redo the intro and get a new guy then. There are 20-30 mistakes in the intro alone. It only got worse from there, lines are frequently missing punctuation, misgendering not only the main character but also others(there is literally only two guys why are some of the girls being referred to as he? and why is the MC referred to as a she?), the dialog box also has the wrong name for when a character is speaking multiple times, and finally the MC's thoughts are frequently not marked in () when they should be.