Really interesting music, the rhythms and the textures were especially fun to listen to! The overall atmosphere you achieve is very beautiful and immersive, the main thing for me is the presentation. I think touching up things like the mix, cleaning up the rhythm, and having a bit more development on your great leitmotif would really help elevate your work to another level. For example, I love the section that starts from 1:10 ish, with its energetic drums and new textures. However, the mix between the different elements confuses me a bit. Do you want me to listen to the piano with the leitmotif? Or the synth that pans left and right? Also, the rhythm on the piano is a bit off, which can also be confusing. If you cleared up the mix by bringing forward the elements you want the listener to focus on, and also use something like quantization to clean up the rhythm, I think that part would be way more engaging to listen to! I really like the vibe of your music, and I hope what I wrote is helpful in some way!