Not sure if you read these Jonesy, but when it comes to Willow.. Directly from a very southern Georgia girl... please don't do that with her dialogue hahaha I'm not sure if I find it offensive or what, but it's definitely very cringe worthy hahaha I love your stories to death but yeah. All the attempts to phoneticize her accent as well as the, what? corrected speech in parentheses removes me from the story. I already read with my accent in my head which makes it a train wreck to get through hahaha ;)
Ha! Sorry if it ruined the immersion of the scene. To be honest, I hesitated to write it out that way for just that reason. I got mixed reviews from my "test audience", so I said screw it and left it in.
Trust me, I meant no disrespect. This is the way my entire family talks. It's *supposed* to be a more mid-Atlantic country twang. I know you guys down in GA sound a bit different from us in NC, TN, or VA. Either way, if I missed the mark, or worse, made it more of a distraction than a cute dialect thing, I apologize. I love Willow's character and I really DO love the Southern/country accent - I think it's sexy as hell, so I also hope you're not offended by my clumsy attempt to bring it into my story. The last thing I wanted was to make it a Hollywood caricature we've all heard and grumbled about our entire lives.
Thanks for reading my stories. I'm glad you're liking things so far regardless of accents, phonics, etc. Thank you so much for saying something. I need this kind of feedback! I may go back and adjust things a bit when I release chapter 3 just to tone it down a little.
Anyway, thanks again! Now back to working on Ch5 of NYD!
It's funny cos reading Charlie and Bobby I always assumed that they had southern-ish accents on how you already write them. Things they say are very southern. Like Booby calls her "darlin" and stuff. Some stories I can just tell the accent. Like if they are Canadian or English, by how they are written. I felt your stories took place between my state, Georgia (maybe Florida) and Virginia so that's funny you say that haha Honestly I do like Willow. And you did such a wonderful job with this chapter, I just want it to keep going. I'm definitely looking forward to New Years continuing as well. Not to sound weird but your stories are a personal pleasure to read and I def plan on supporting them as much as I can. The more I think about it, it's not really offensive, just cringe and rough and I did have to skip some of it ;/ None of it kept me from enjoying the story or made me want to stop. I'm too hooked on these to just drop them over something silly like that. Hope you're doing good btw and thanks for the reply You rock Jonesy! <3
That's actually very cool. I never considered that my writing "voice" had an accent. I guess I didn't realize how my use of vernacular also carries an inherent accent. I guess I used a sledgehammer to get my point across when I could've just given it a nudge with a finger instead and gotten the desired result (I have a tendency to do that from time to time). I'll keep this in mind going forward. Thanks again!