Achmad, I like the art in this game! But I think the writing/structure needs a lot of help. Your story should feel interactive, but in this case all the branches just lead to instanta death - there's no real choices for the player. Your characters also have a very samey feel. I think you would really benefit from finding a collaborator who can focus on the writing. Just my suggestion - any game is obviously a labor of love and it's clear you're working hard!