My feedback for Inner animals showing off:
What your game does well:
Your game provides players with all the necessary information, scenery, and tools to start playing.
It also places a heavy emphasis on the 'Magic Circle' of games and other media. Players really have to be willing to embrace the rules of the game in order to have fun.
What your game doesn't do well:
The Rulebook is unorganized, and in a lot of places its difficult to follow. The rules are all there, but people don't know where to find them at first glance.
Areas of Opportunity:
Fixing the rulebook is just a matter of changing the language in some areas to make it easier to follow, and formatting the text so that there's a hierarchy (a table of contents, for example).
I hope this feedback helps!