Considering that this game is obviously still in the early stages of its development, I must say that I'm thoroughly impressed with what you've provided thus far! The story is intriguing, though I feel like it does get on a little quicker than it should.
Wish I knew more about developing a game, otherwise I'd offer my help with dialogue and such. Some of its a little hard to read. I'm no grammar Nazi, but I know people who will drop a game instantly the moment they notice grammatical errors.
Either way, enjoying the game and looking forward to more content! Keep up the good work.