I feel like there's some potential here, but I couldn't quite figure out how to do stuff. I think a couple of really clear puzzles could help to make it more obvious.
One note for future jams is you might not want to put a comment on your own page until after it has some reviews. I usually check out the games in need of reviews page and if a game has comments but no reviews, I assume it doesn't work and people are commenting that.
Great job though. I really liked the inner monologue bits and feel like that could be a really interesting way to tell a story.