this was such, such an amazing read !! i read this all in silence, and wow did it intesify the moment. this was incredibly well written and even amazingly coded, i cannot believe it is your first time with twine!! every use of pause, was so purposeful and effective in setting the tension behind each word.
i felt that it was so. real? every emotion behind the words on the screen felt so raw to me, the fear, the hatred, the dread, every emotion that was not pretty, i felt it. the use of pixel art was such a great choice, especially the eye. i felt that was such a chilling moment, and the way you wrote it from words of comfort to words of warning, was so so smart and beautiful that it made me sit there for a moment
overall, this writing was amazing. it felt so natural to read through, so personal and delivered everything so well even without stating outright what occurred!! i could gush abt this all day, definetly remembering this and replaying it whenever, amazing use of storytelling. you scared me, but also deeply moved me :)