a couple of things that I saw here repeated in another game of yours.
This is a porn game, yes, I am aware that I’m playing it but my god is your design choice and the sex thrown right at my face 24x7 while playing the game.
Too many words, not that I’m saying that my porn infused brain has made me unable to read long sentences, but there are too many dialogues before something happens.
You need to find the sweet spot, both with the dialogues and your design choice. Wrt your design choice, again, the girls are all reeking sex. Maybe that’s what you’re aiming for and it does work but Have some sort of build up, anticipation and pay off. A couple of games I played, tentacles thrive, misadventure.itch.io, callous company have done that very nicely.
I honestly enjoyed the game, and you clearly have a lot of potential. Wishing you the best ahead in life.