oh, dear! i'm not quite sure if you got the fact this was made in a month, in order to submit it to NaNoRenO? either way, i think the idea of keeping him hostage for the good ending don't just make a great critique in details, but shows how well written this was, but, specially, how Jenny was NOT afraid to thrwn in this 'fantasy' element LOL
either way fr what a great idea the interactive comment and WHY DOES EVERY JENNY'S CHARACTER HAS TO SING AND MAKE US FALL IN LOVE UGHHHHHHHHH