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Enjoying the vn thus far,  really like the narrative style and of course the content . Have noticed some redundancy in descriptions though. For example,  the first paragraph. You don't need to mention it's the cabin of the car, since you already mentioned it was a car engine, just small things like that,  but they can add up

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Thanks for the catch! I try my best, but some redundancies are bound to slip in, hah. 

The writing certainly smoothes our later. The prologue is the roughest part of this story. I had never written in extended first person before, and the VN format was completely new to me. 

Thanks for still giving it a chance, though ~

Oh! And if you find more mistakes, feel free to message me privately on Itch or Twitter to let me know! I'd love to fix them.