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Absolutely love the concept. I've actually set an alarm for the release of this (v0.2) update, but in the end there was no need for the alarm at all.

I must say, though, the dialogue, despite making sense so far, is not at all pleasing to read. It lacks tone, emotion — that scene where Lucy argues with Benjamin did not feel like arguing at all. It would, however, if she where to scream across the living room when she went to her room after walking out. Caps lock, exclamations and overall proper ponctuation would completely change how the dialogue reads. Along with that, you should definitely revise your text before publishing updates to make sure the grammar is right (or, you could try to get someone to do that for you).


Another thing I believe would be worth mentioning is that Benjamin looks unsettling. Not in a "I don't like this guy" way, as I'm sure that would be intended: its model looks off. Benjamin doesn't look like the asshole uncle that anyone would want to fuck over, he looks like the annoying cousin that breaks your shit and tells his mom it was your fault. He looks way too young, his proportions are not really masculine, and with his name being Ben, I can't help but compare him to Ben Shapiro the whole time. I beg of  you, please rework his model, or at the very least, its head.

Either way, critique aside, I wish you and your project the best, I'll be looking forward for the updates!

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Thank you for your feedback. I've read one already that was very close to yours (I guess it was you). I will work on the points you mentioned, since I agree with most of them. But first I would need to implement planned features and fix the game breaking bugs :D

Perfectly understandable! Assuming it was in f95zone, it most certainly was me, then. Once again, keep up the good work, I'll be gladly following the progress!