You’ve got something really nice going on here! It’s a great start to a novel, and I think it has a lot of potential. The setting is interesting, the writing solid, and there’s a good, broad cast of characters. The characters work together well, and are each interesting in their own right. The sprite-work and CG art is, frankly, gorgeous, and is backed up by well-chosen BG art. The music is also top-notch, and caters well to what’s going on at any moment. I find that particularly impressive, by the way.
I appreciate the design choice to make Chapter 2 its own self-contained story. That works nicely, in my opinion, and I hope it’s something you’ll continue to do in later chapters. It makes reading an update a satisfying experience, rather than leaving the reader wondering when a ‘to be continued screen’ will pop up!
There have been some negative comments on here, but I hope they haven’t discouraged you. While I only focused on the one route, Edward’s, I thought the pacing there was absolutely fine. Chapter 2 stood well on its own, and introduced some interesting ideas and character points that can be followed up in later chapters. I had no particular problem with the MC, whose actions seem reasonable to me given the situation and his background. For my money, he didn’t seem annoying either, but that’s just my opinion. I also liked the nautical navigation scene, too. I thought it worked well in the setting, and seemed fair enough to me. But again, opinions will vary.
Anyway, I hope you’re pleased with what you’ve made so far. You’ve made something good here, and I look forward to seeing where you go with it all in the future!