Nice! I particularly like the art style and music ^^ Text could use polish here and there. Some suggestions:
- "Please find out who killed Foxy Detective" -> "Please find out who killed Foxy, Detective!"
- The orig was missing a comma, making it sound like the word "Foxy" was being used as an adjective to describe "detective". It was also missing an exclamation mark (or if you'd prefer, a period) at the end.
- You know the part in the notepad about Foxy bringing strange items? I think it'd be best to have that in its own bullet point.
- "Welcome detective, I'm glad that you got to our little village so quickly." -> "Welcome, detective. I'm glad that you have arrived at our little village so quickly."
- Felt it'd be best to split this in two. It felt like the orig was using "Welcome" as an adjective for "detective".