My opinion so far of this game an interesting plot similar to Entreum if I do say so myself. I assume you were inspired by said game? Anyway it's good game my only complaint and take it with grain of salt I've just started writing and learning the elements of characters dialog. But you need to show not tell with some scenes. For example, when Lara was acting strange in the kitchen we the viewers/readers already know this since from her blushing and stuttering in said dialog there's no need to have the MC have inner thoughts twice about said subject. With that said the writing is good I find it enjoyable! 9/10 so far keep it up my good sir