Good demo! I especially enjoyed the beginning part. As far as the interactions with two male LIs, perhaps making them longer would make bigger impact. The way the CGs appear (blurriness and zooming in an out slowly), could be improved, especially without the blurring effect. I think UI is fine. There is one grammatical error ( when Tristan helps in a fight, "assaulants" mistake). Also, perhaps include less choices but make the remaining ones more impactful? That would also lessen the burden on you. Good luck!