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He never said that,you're not getting the point of what he meant. Neither did I the grammar and over all english was shite lol. But what I'm getting from his rant is how you are molding the main character to sound like a little beta or loser. In retrospective he's kind of right make him relatable give him some more charm let him be an extension of yourself per se him whining about being a virgin and getting not girls does gets tiresome to some readers. Hope that helped 

thank you! You summerised it perfectly and sorry not good at spelling English is my 2nd language 

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well I suggest powering through until chapter 2 it gets pretty good we get to know the main character better he's actually likeable in my opinion 

alright I'll try