Wow, what expectations I had were blown clear outta the water. I feel like the deluge of BS happening to Lucian in the first few chapters when things get really rolling was maybe a bit much ^^; But still a fantastic story so far that subverts a lot of visual novel expectations! Interesting brand of horror, too—not the gory kind, but the freaky weird kind. Plus some great humor moments! A good story needs a sense of humor.
I personally feel for Lucian. He has a LOT going on, poor guy, but is still called selfish and whiny—I have some shit going on and the same happens to me. It can be a bit difficult to realize when you're being selfish. I get the feeling I am far from the only one, so I think it's good to have this be a teachable theme.
Only problem I really have is that the punctuation isn't used well in places, and there are a number of spelling or word use mistakes. I'm really only bothered because such a well-written story deserves to look a little more professional ^^; I could still understand it, tho, so not a huge deal :)
Gonna keep tabs on this! Just hope it doesn't get SUPER dark....