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This is a really nice produced microgame!

First, I would change “And by who?” with “By whom?” It’s still stylistic and it gives you one more word to spare.

Neverthless this change you still have contain 5(6) more words and I believe you could fit in some more content, for example:

Can’t confront directly. Transform first.

Or something more modern, softer:

Loose humanity to overcome obstacles.

Or you could exchange “what’s your end” with “embark fate” and go more traditional way to introduce some good old resolution mechanic:

Obstacle? d6 +1 per ability. Success: 4+.

Still, even without any changes it’s quite a touching concept.