This is so beautiful! The art is lovely and the story feels well developed for the length. In an ideal world the things of note on the games page would be baked into the story but honestly I don't mind the exposition that much for the sake of the story to be told. And sometimes you do just need to explain the odd sensibilities of the Omegaverse.
Notes for improvement would be that sometimes it felt like the music varied in volume, one track would be good but the next would be quieter. Some of the transitions involving character sprites felt a bit abrupt, so seeing the dissolve or move transition/command might help in the future. I'm new to programming in Ren'py so hopefully this is actually helpful advice!
An amazing debut game, honestly. Had much fun playing!