Very happy to see your completed story. The plot is very easy to follow. It explicitly explained what happened in the story, and readers are not easily lose their interests because scenes are closely connected with each other. The tension in the story is controlled just right. It makes me hold my breath while finishing it. I sneak into the creek so I survived... If the background pictures follows a same aesthetic style and appears to be crispier, it will be a even better add-on to the story.