The maps could do to be a good bit smaller, and there were a lot of typos and grammatical errors. The writing itself is all over the place as well, and at times it can come across as needlessly dark (the grandfather) or all over the place (the man suddenly turning into a demon and attacking her). At other times, it comes across as goofy/silly (her being leveled up to 69).
It needs a lot more work on the writing and grammar, and some of the events can easily be broken (for instance, if you enter the back entrance area from a different door you are able to bypass all of the monsters chasing you).