I'm fascinated by this concept. I've played exquisite corpse games before and had fun, but this adds a super interesting emotional level I haven't seen before.
However, the tone poem that is your rule-set made the game impenetrable for us. We spent a few hours trying to figure it out, but couldn't quite crack it.
To reach a broader audience (which I feel like it could!), consider writing out a more pointed turn structure. I have a feeling the concept is simple, but it's obfuscated right now.
Cheers!