the new version runs very well !! i could've sworn i'd played the grocery shopping chapter and commented but i can't find it on the old site so
love the range of siruud's aliases
looove how snarky, and flirtatious, the banter gets, like mc commenting on eden/siruud's clothing and "so we're in this mess because you wanted to be petty" as well as the exposition "the most sacred rule of non-engagement, holiest in the bulk supermarket"
the thought of eden/siruud standing in the supermarket entrance profoundly confused is hilarious
oohh the suspense of adrien bright and what both tahira and siruud are holding back good good GOOD
i found a small(?) repetition and hopefully screenshots are a good way to relay this