Likes:
- Good choice of font
- Female Reaper is a nice twist. Only other example of that I can think of is Susan Sto Helit from Pratchett's Discworld series.
- Writing is descriptive and nuanced
Dislikes:
- Final "sting" is weak as you've already made the big reveal in the game description
- Entirely linear and non-interactive. This isn't necessarily a fault but in this case I think it weakens the entry a bit.
Good work.