This was really well done. Reminds me a bit of the manga Octave in its characters and story. Another thing this has in common with Octave is that it has a very distinct art style that I quite like. You're obviously a very experienced writer and it showed in this piece. Out of all the games I played of the YuriJam, yours easily is in my top 3 favorites. A fantastic job overall. Keep up the good work and continue writing. I'd love to see what you do next.