Hi APEX PHOENIX,
Unfortunately I don’t have Windows, so I can’t test the game itself. But based on the game’s page and the video trailer I have some suggestions, if that is all right?
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I’d prefer to see the trailer of the game somewhere on the top of the page, like above the screenshots. So if someone decides to learn about the game from a video, instead of anything else, they can do so there.
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Just looking at the screenshots of the game, I had no idea what the game is about. To me it looks like various areas with no connection between them, I didn’t even notice the orb.
It’s a 3D, bug-free app
- All games have bugs, when calling a game “bug-free” its like saying you haven’t found them :)
ORBDASH is a new product of our indie game production company, APEX PHOENIX ENTERTAINMENT, in 2020. It’s a 3D, bug-free app that you can download and install on Windows (both 32 bit & 64 bit) operating system.
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It mentions this is an indie company, but the copy sounds like what a lawyer would say. I’d suggest to take advantage of the fact that you are indie, and be more straightforward about what this game is about. It will make you sound more warm and approachable.
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In general the game’s page could use some work. Maybe add some more colours. Maybe not repeat the logo twice on the body of the text.
(Please watch the trailer in 720p for the best quality.)
- I think this line is not necessary.
Hope this helps, these are all my opinions, so feel free to pick only the ones you like :)