Nice first submission here! I like the idea of the game and the execution, but it is just a few minutes long, if you play all endings. I don't know the reason behind that, but this way it is not a story with much meat, if you get what I mean. As a writer I can tell you, such stories can bloom very good, if you explore the internal conflicts of your characters or their conflicts with other characters. If your story has a certain direction, than you can take your player on a journey to somewhere, that's always a good thing! Keep it up!