I loved this! Cool story, with good humour.
This line made me crack up: "Of course, the older human, 'Cpt. Krillor', dominates the space, asserting his superiority to his inferiors. You're tempted to kill him on the spot, however he begins to speak..."
Some nice atmospheric music could have complimented the experience.
It sucks that you had to start over because of a corrupted file :( Unity might have been an overkill for this though.
Keep up mate!