Okay I finished playing Devlin's route and I have a lot of thoughts.
First, I do notice that you reworded a lot of things. In my opinion, that did make the sentences more polished but that in turn, take away a lot of MC's personality. Her personality was what made the Summer Found Me so enjoyable to me. It sounds less like something she would say and more of an English essay? Or something like that. Less human and more.. Proper. I hope you understand what I mean lol.
I also notice there are sentences / phrases / wordd you take away completely. Like when Aidan wanted to take her picture and said "please.. For me?" She blushed and gave in to it cuz he said "for me" I thought that was super cute but you took that away. There were a lot of passages you took away that I actually liked and gave the characters more flavor.
Also the MC doesn't have a sprite now. I think in my opinion, that took away more of her personality that I so adore. Her expression, along with her witty responses were what made the game enjoyable to me. It's just all text now. It makes it feel less personal I suppose. I also like that she was more awkward before like when she reluctantly admit Devlin is good looking like "You're good looking.. Hot. I mean no not hot but" something like that. It fits with her personality
god I just realized how much I know about the previous version. It goes to show just how much I loved it
There are quite a lot of lines I actually miss like seth being a savage when MC said "oooh is that a new handbag?" seth: "No, that's Cherri" or him saying "Ugh, pass" instead of just "Pass" I donno. It's my opinion. XD Overall it's safe to say I like the previous version better but maybe I'm biased?
Also Cherri and MC are fantastic characters together. Even tho the MC is kinda like "not like other girls" but you don't undermine girls who do like shopping, who do like "girly" things which is awesome. That makes the MC a great character paired up with a bff like Cherri.
That's all I have to say for now. Hahahaha I still love love your work. Only I prefer the previous version and these are the reasons why.