It's great to see the continuing tradition of visual novels play a major presence in jams. I think this is a unique idea - to have a series of horror vignettes means a lot more variety and also more shorter, punchy and impressionable stories. I liked how the two stories were tonally different, one creepy and the other scary. They also harnessed Ren'Py in a very effective way and made the most of the platform. I also think the hand-drawn assets were quite cutely-done and would love to see more!
I think from a writing perspective the only feedback is that there could be more potential to flesh out (pun intended) the narrative after the twists in the story. I would have loved to know what the deal with the toilet monster was, or the story behind getting preserved alive. But regardless these are very dark and inventive stories and I can't wait to see what comes of the next ones you make!
Thanks for submitting Horror Clip to the SCREAM LITE jam!