A well-told story! Not to be all High-School-English class here, but I liked the repetition. It worked to the game's advantage, and the final subversion helped to sell the hopelessness of it all. Branching paths that all lead to the same dead end (pardon the pun)? I like it and I'll take it. Garbling text is a nice touch as well. Great work! :D
Also, here's some bad fan art:
