I loved the proposal, I like more mature projects, doing something a little more serious and still fun is very difficult, and you did it! However, despite the focus being narrative, maybe you have exaggerated a little, this, because everything was textual, nowadays many texts end up being massive, I think you could reevaluate the way of telling the story you want! I say this from my own experience, I have already created projects that I lost a little bit of time when telling the story and because of the not-so-smart implementation, it ended up getting very massive! Great job!