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Hello P0rthos47,

Nice job! Got some feedback for your game:

1. Graphically, it's pretty pleasing to look at!

2. Mechanically, the d20 +d6 is nice. It's a way to have more critical situations that works. What does the Threat level do? Also, took me a minute to find the DCs (on the bottom of page 1). I'd put it on the first page for sure.

3. LOVE the character / ship creation. Also the Banes / Ailment. That's cool. And I love that there is a way to level up and multiple ways to level.

4. All the tables are good... but I wish they were a bit less generic. Like I want more evocative names / settings. Tables are a great place to bake in setting. EDIT: Ok got to the 3rd page and those tables are a step closer to where the other tables could go.

5. Your oracle is a nice design. A bit confused about the 5+, 10+, 15+... maybe use ranges or greater / less than? Like I think I understand what you are driving at but was not as sure as I wanted to be.

Overall, excellent job. You have so much packed in here! This may be because the game is on these cards, but the flow / connections between parts was at times difficult to follow. BUT all the parts are here and I really like this!

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Thanks a ton for looking it over and greatly appreciate the review!

Threat level goes up every time a complication is rolled. Higher threat level gives the GM permission to make bigger complications. So rolling a complication when threat level is 1 will be minor compared to rolling a complication at threat level 20. Kind of represents stress and frustration in a mission.

I couldn’t fit the DCs in front page.  😖

I agree on the tables. By and large I left them very high level archetypes as a personal challenge to keep it relatively setting agnostic and just provide a hard edge to crystallize an idea on. Since there was limited space I had to go high level instead of specific. Might go in and make them a little more specific now though  

As to Oracle yeah i can make it a little clearer probably. Good eye.

I’ll have to have an instruction card or something explaining all the modules and how they can work together once the system is done. I really appreciate the feedback!

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