You have a great flair for characterization and pacing! This is def an interesting premise - although I was sad to see it hasn't gotten as far as amnesia yet. The one thing I would suggest is pushing a little more towards the interactive fiction elements, since some of the passages can get a little disconnected from that conceit without options interrupting them - even if those options don't change the story at all.
Hey!
Thanks for playing and reviewing. I've seen a couple of reviews mentioning going more into interactive fiction, and stepping back, I see what you mean. I wanted to make every option branch off and affect something, that I kind of just made it into one of those, "choose your own adventure books" except less choices, rofl.
I'll see how it looks cutting it up further for more choices, before I post up the next weekly update.
Thanks again!