I liked the story; and the way those characters were done was quite cool. The scene with the car made me smile, very well done sir :)
A few points there one can improve would be:
1) better music - it was the thing I disliked the most, it got annoying really fast; it had noticeable cut in the loop; it cut off when moving between areas
2) specific to this gamejam - you made font out of provided letters, but left spacing between letter too big, so text just doesn't look good
3) probably it would be better to use that tileset with cell size of 14x14 instead of 16x16 - quite a few tiles have noticeable gaps between them.