Great narrative developing with some good choices and good pacing. Pacing can be so important for getting your player invested without losing their attention, and you nailed it. You might try playing with your formatting of paragraphs to change flow in the way the player reads the story. Ex:
Suddenly, a creaking sound appears from the doors. You don't know which way it is and decide to walk toward the doors at the end.”
This feels a little different from:
Suddenly, a creaking sound appears from the doors.
You don't know which way it is and decide to walk toward the doors at the end.
Really subtle changes and details can impact how a player’s feelings, whether it’s adding a detail or intentionally leaving a detail out. Good coding, good story-telling! Looking forward to your next one!