Your writing is really good. Everything is so vividly and descriptive, and I felt like I was really in this world. So far I like the interactivity between Kain?( I'm bad with names) and how he already has such personality to him. I know this game is early in development, so one suggestion I could give is to remove the slow dissolve feature if you're going back to a previous point. I like how they're done as you're progressing, but if you want to have the player go back to previous points, the transitions can get tiring. Otherwise, I'm looking forward to the game when it's done!